В последнем предложении заменить passable на possible
Marina Fyodorovapublicó una nota 9 years ago
Please, can any one check my essay?
The topic is "With the increase in use of the Internet, books will soon become unnecessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?".
Here we go:
Will there be a day when all the people on the Earth stop use paper books in favor of devices with the internet connection that provide us with electronic books (which is also called e-book) and other informative materials? This is a relevant question of our time as the internet became essential part of the most people.
Probably that day will not come while paper books have some advantages. For example those who cares about their eyesight would choose a paper copy of a book. Because if we compare negative effects that is caused by looking at a screen or a book for the same time then the former would be worse.
Another case when a paper format has an upper hand is when you simply can"t afford to pay for a device or the internet connection. Because a book is definitely much cheaper. But again, it depends on amount of books that the person is going to read.
And also someone can fill their bookshelves or bookcases with them and use them as a piece of interior. Of cause it wouldn"t be the most rational way to use them but one never knows what is on the other"s mind and what is more convenient for them. Some people just can"t change their habits and continue read books despite all the pluses of e-books which also have a place.
The most convincing arguments to choose e-book for the people who already has a smartphone or a laptop are: its price, access at any time without the need to carry a heavy book and the tree"s salvation.
In my opinion e-books will not replace the paper format completely any time soon but it is quite passable to happen in the future if all the pluses loose their significance.
Discusión (6)
В последнем предложении заменить passable на possible
Okay, starting from the very beginning:
- electronic books (which ARE also called e-bookS) - if you started writing a word in plural in a sentence, you should keep it this way to the end of the sentence).
- became essential part of the most people'S LIFE (or "lifestyle") - Internet can't become someone's part (well, at least not yet:), it can become part of someone's life/lifestyle.
- For example those who care (no -s) - "those" is plural.
- negative effects that ARE caused...
- for the same PERIOD of time (sounds more natural than "for the same time")
- of course (not "of cause")
- "on the other's mind" sounds odd. "On the other person's mind" sounds better.
- despite all the pluses... - better use "advantages" instead. It's more literate.
- arguments to choose AN e-book for the people who already HAVE a smartphone...
- possible (not "passible")
Thank you guys so mush!! Especially Olga ;) I agree with every correction. It's all the same stupid mistakes, why don't I see them?! :)
...much...
You're welcome, Marina :) Don't worry, you'll get there. Just takes time and practice :)