AL, в вашем переводе не хватает вопросительного знака

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=in+the+evening+time%2Cat+the+evening%2Cwhen+the+evening+was%2Cwhen+it+was+evening&year_start=1800&year_end=2000&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Cin%20the%20evening%20time%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cat%20the%20evening%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cwhen%20the%20evening%20was%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cwhen%20it%20was%20evening%3B%2Cc0

https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=in+the+evening+time%2Cwhen+the+evening+was%2Cwhen+it+was+evening&year_start=1800&year_end=2000&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Cin%20the%20evening%20time%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cwhen%20the%20evening%20was%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cwhen%20it%20was%20evening%3B%2Cc0

grumbler, я решил, судя по исходной фразе, что здесь уместна инверсия... ) Но, по-видимому, я ошибся... Инверсию убираю

На мой взгляд сравнивать довольно бессмысленно.
По русски тоже обычно говорят "вечером", а не "когда был вечер"